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Monday, December 18, 2006

An Embarrassing Experience (draft 1 )

To think of my embarrassing experience, there were many interesting things about me. One day, on my way to the classroom wiht my friends. When I made a turn, I went to stray with my friends. Later, I saw the sight of y friend's back. I ran to behind her back and hit her shoulder lightly. But it was scared me when turned back. Because I don't know is she. And then, I fled when I saw the student right away. I felt so disgraced then. Once bitten by a snake, one shies at a coiled rope for thr next ten years. Hereafter, I find my riends or my family when I wander away with them, I will be more careful.

3 Comments:

Blogger 飛奇 said...

"Later, I saw the sight of y friend's back. "
我不太懂那個y是指...?

"But it was scared me when turned..."
我想你的意思應該是"但當她轉頭時,我被她嚇到了"所以正確來說應是:"But she scared me when she turned back." ↑↑scare不用加be動詞,turn前面加個she更清晰是誰轉頭過來

"Because I don't know is she."文法有些錯,應該是"...know who she is"

6:23 AM  
Blogger 郭包子 said...

打字錯的有點多…看的有點吃力
我有點看不太懂在寫什麼…
可能有點偏離主題了吧?!

7:51 PM  
Blogger GIGI said...

妳打完要check 一下喔!

2:18 AM  

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