My bedroom (draft 1)
My bedroom is a warm place. When you enter my room, you can see a big bed. I like the bed very much. When I felt tired, I loved to lie on the bed to relax. There is a TV on cabinet in the left corner. The right wall is lined with commode that it has a lot of clothes. The small cabinet is next to the bed. I furnish a big mirror between the TV and the small cabinet. The bookcases are put on the left next to the bed. I have many pillows and dolls on the bed. I like to hold my pillow when I was sleeping.
posted by Carol @ 7:32 PM
3 Comments:
When I feel tired, I loved laid on the bed for relax.時態要一致
The right wall is lined with commode that it has a lot of clothes.這個it可以不要吧
這篇文章好像沒有結論句
你沒有寫到你的床是在哪個位置?
"There is a TV on cabinet in the left corner..."
cabinet前面應加個the,下面有句也是一樣
When you enter my room,→你可以寫When entering my room
like →take to ,to be fond of
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