A dream I had
I had a strange and freakish dream. I‘ve dreamed the same dream before. In my dream, zombies are pursuing after us. To escape being clutch, we keep running. We were too tried to run and zombies overhang us. Suddenly, an old lady appeared before our eyes. Then, she gave us three swords to each person. The sword twinkled in the sunlit light. We held the sword and braced up for the arduous dare. Clang~clang~, we fight with the eldritch zombie. The alarm clock gave tinkle. I roused up from sleep. I think that I won the battle in the dream at length.

3 Comments:
在夢裡…應該是要用過去式吧
你的時態沒有一致哦zombies are pursuing after us. We were too tried to run and zombies overhang us.
我喜歡一下下就看完的fu^^
你的結局…感覺有點牽強 可以再多加一點東西
我覺得你可以改,
1)
I have dreamded the same dream again and again.
2)
你應該把時態用過去是比較好ㄅ
Dream好多喔~~
第二句後面的dream應該可以去掉
因為你第一句就已經提過了
"Suddenly, an old lady appeared before our eyes..."
在你的眼後你應該是看不到的...
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